This is painfully sad

i love being socialist hammer and sickle but all these stupid tankies and stupid and fickle i didnt wipe my butt i just pooped and got up

In an informal setting, abbreviations such as “u” for “you” can be excused, but “ur” should neither be used for “your” (which is more frequent) nor for “you are”, not only because of the lack of distinction, but also because “ur-”, in political contexts, is commonly used as a prefix loaned from German, where it means a primal or archetypal instance. The excess of exclamation marks and ellipses does not make up for the general lack of commata, semicola, and other assorted punctuation. It also seems grammatically suspicious to use the adverb “so” as if it were to establish a logical implication between “lib” - here illicitly singularised - and “rule” - a transitive verb.

The words “evil china communist mind” should not appear as they do, partly because “evil” is an adjective of general opinion and should appear before “communist”, which is an adjective of specific opinion, which in turn should be written in front of “china”, an adjective of origin or material; partly because if “china” refers to the material, the more appropriate adjective would be “porcelain”, whereas if it refers to the country, you would use “Chinese” and it would have to be capitalised.

One should steer clear of vacuous utterances such as “stupd [sic] tankies are stupid”, as well as including microphone test phrases verbatim in the written records of actual performances of the rap, or hallucinations thereof. However, if the rap was indeed composed in writing, it might be seen as insolent towards the readership to suggest they should make do with “the gist of it”, rather than the thereby implied more nuanced and refined original version. Be careful with dubious presumptions such as “i [sic] think it’s obvious I’ve won”, which might raise subsequent questions from the readership regarding the criteria and metrics through whose evaluation you have arrived at such a judgement.

“Lie” does not rhyme with “mind”, neither do “nottanist” (whatever this means) and “this”, “tankies” and “dankie [sic]”, or “mic” and “light”. On the matter of the content, you will be surprised to learn that farming is not, in fact, a lie, but the manner in which the majority of humanity procures food since the neolithic revolution about twelve thousand years ago.

dies from cringe

Can I please get some criticism? CONSTRUCTIVE ONLY.

Don’t quit your day job.

farming is a lie?